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If love were real you would love me. You, with your sad muddy eyes and pale white lips shriveled from the sun's grudging gaze. If love were real I would whisper lies into your mind to appease your troubled heart and hold your cold hand and //feel// your icy fingers curl on mine.

If love were real I would love you. But it's not.

- I like it a lot. I think you should put a semicolon between lips and shriveled in line 4. Maybe your title could be "But it's not". I really like the ending, and the line breaks. - Manaswita

I really like your poem. It could relate to many people. Just //one// suggestion: You started the first stanza with "if love were real", and the second stanza "if love were real". I think you should put a stanza break after line five and have all 3 stanzas start with "if love were real". Only a suggestion, so you don't have to do it... - Jonathan Roth cr. writing 2b